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2016年英语四级作文之保持结构简洁

对于一篇优秀的作文来说最重要的就是删繁就简,结构简洁,英语四级作文也是如此,下面我们就和大家详细介绍一下,希望对各位英语四级考生有帮助。

  繁冗的写作堆砌了许多无用的词藻,反而减弱表述的清晰度。当然,也不能仅仅因为简短就认为短句一定优于长句。只要一个单词确实能起到一定的作用,它就应该留在句中。一般来说,只有在进行强调或修饰、美化句子时,才能使用重复的单词、语音和短语。修改文章,就是要删繁就简。比较下面这对句子,注意体会二者的差别及效果。

  1) Dr. Sun Yat-sen went to Japan by means of a big boat.

  2) Dr. Sun Yat-sen went to Japan by boat.

  斜体字部分较啰嗦,因为"by"就是"by means of boat"。

  请看下列例句:

  Wordy: It makes me feel painful

  to think that she has to work

  12 hours a day and seven days a week.

  Better: It pains me to think

  that she has to work 12 hours a

  day and seven days a week.

  Wordy: It will be our aim to

  ensure proper health care for

  each and every one of the Chinese people.

  Better: Our aim is to ensure

  proper health care for all Chinese.

  Wordy: This book will help you

  master the basic elements of good writing.

  Better: This book will help you

  master the basics of good writing.

  Wordy: The search of the forest

  that they conducted was entirely complete.

  Better: The search of the forest

  was complete.

  或They conducted a complete search of

  the forest.

  第二个句子合乎汉语表达习惯,即他们对森林进行了彻底的搜查。

  Wordy: He has no sense of principles,

  whether he is in public or in private.

  Better: He has no principles,public

  or private.

  Wordy: Whenever anyone telephoned

  her to ask her for help with their

  homework she always obliged right away.

  Better: She immediately obliged

  anyone who telephoned for help with homework.

  Wordy: In a cautious manner the car went

  around the corner.

  Better: The car negotiated the corner.

  Wordy: If the government agency finds

  that an individual has received a payment to

  which the individual was not entitled,

  Whether or not the payment was due to the

  individual’s fault or misrepresentation,

  the individual shall be liable to repay to

  the government the total sum of the payment

  to which the individual was not entitled.

  Better: If the government agency finds that

  you received a payment that you weren’t

  entitled to, you must pay the entire sum back.

  Wordy: Another important aspect is good

  health.It is one of our great blessings.

  It may be achieved through proper diet

  and exercise. Rest is also desirable.

  Better: The great blessing of good health may

  be had through proper diet, exercise, and rest.

  词语简化的一些技巧

  策略之一:用介词短语替代从句。

  例:

  Wordy: While they were playing tennis, she

  started an argument that lasted all morning.

  Better: During tennis she started an argument

  that lasted all morning.

  Wordy: When you come to the second traffic

  light, turn right.

  Better: At the second traffic light turn left.

  策略之二:删除诸如"who is”或"that is"之类的关系代词,变从句为短语。

  例:

  Wordy: The novel, which is written in

  three parts, told a story that took place

  in the Middle Ages.

  Better: The three-part novel told a

  story set in the Middle Ages.

  注:把句中的”three parts”改用形容词来表达,节省了四个不必要的单词”which is written in”。我们经常可以将关系代词如”that”去掉,这只会引起最少的变动。

  策略之三:剔除你不需要的单词

  "Two joint partners will present their

  views over a long-distance telephone call. "

  写完这样的句子后,你自己再读一遍,挑出单词”joint”和”telephone”,注意删去不必要的词。

  策略之四:表达否定意义时,尽量避免使用否定词。英语中很多词不用 "no’s" 或者"not’s"也能表达否定含义的词汇,你尽可以采取更为委婉的表达方式。

  例:

  Thus college students who do not have

  sufficient financial backing ,

  也就是 college students who lacks

  sufficient financial backing。

  如果你不想使用太多的否定词,就应该尽量避免使用它们。

以上就是有关词语简化的相关内容,希望对大家有帮助。

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